Explanation Writing Sample Term 2 2010

My writing is called - How a baby grows during pregnancy It is an Explanation My learning goal is 1. To use a variety of sentences e.g. simple, compound and complex 2. To use correct spelling and punctuation
My Questions	My Research
1. Question one 2. 3. 4. 5.	Facts Facts Facts & Key Words
Planning my Writing
L.I. To write an explanation using correct structure and language features. S.C. 1.) I can see and point out my Title, Statement or Question, Sequence, and Conclusion. 2.) I can identify good use of actions verbs, technical terms, present tense and adverbial phrases. 3.) My writing follows a logical sequence to explain how/why 4.) I have used correct spelling, punctuation and grammar in my explanation.		Purpose/Audience For other pregnant woman to read or research Content & Ideas I am writing about how a baby grows and develops All of my writing needs to link to developing babies I can elaborate on growth at different stages and key ideas **Explanation Sequence Structure/Organisation 1st Trimester 2nd Trimester 3rd Trimester Birth Keeping Healthy
Title Statement Explanation Conclusion
I achieved my goal because

Teacher Comment **

CATEGORY	Level 1	Level 2	Level 3	Level 4
Purpose & Audience	I write for myself. I have tried to explain a simple idea.	I know I am writing for an audience. I have explained a simple idea well.	I know I am writing for a an audience and I have made some good choices with my content, language and writing style.	I know I am writing for a an audience and I have made a number of good choices with my content, language and writing style.
Structure	I have some good sentences, most of my facts are written in the order that I learnt them.	I have used simple factual statements about my topic.	I have tried to sequence my explanation it is mostly in a logical order (introduction, body, conclusion). I have used some sectioning or paragraphing and link main ideas together.	I have sequenced my explanation logically (introduction, body, conclusion). I use sectioning or paragraphing and link main ideas together.
Ideas & Content	I have written about my personal experience about what happened or how something works. I have included some statements that are unrelated e.g. I like rocks.	I have identified what happened or how something works using simple language. I have included some statements that are unrelated e.g. I like rocks.	I have clearly identified what happened or how something works. Most of my writing is relevant to my topic. My writing is a straightforward sequence of why/how things happen or work	I have clearly identified what happened or how something works. All of my writing is relevant to my topic. My writing elaborates on ideas and/or includes reasons for why/how things happen or work.
Language Features	I have used some language related to my topic and lots of high frequency words I know. I have used simple, factual and some descriptive language. I have used mostly simple sentences.	I have used some language related to my topic. I have used language to tell how it is or happens but have used present tense. I have used mostly simple and compound sentences with some changes in my sentence beginnings.	I have used language related to my topic. I have used language to tell how it is or happens but have mostly used present tense. I have used a variety of sentence structures, beginnings and lengths for effect.	I have used technical language. I have consistently used precise, descriptive, factual language and correct timeless tense. I have used a variety of sentence structures, beginnings and lengths for effect.
Grammar	I have used mostly simple sentences and some compound sentences. Sometimes it is tricky to read what I have written.	I have mostly used correct grammar with writing simple and compound sentences.	I have used most grammatical conventions correctly when writing simple, compound and some complex sentences.	I have used most grammatical conventions accurately when writing simple, compound and complex sentences.
Spelling	I have attempted to spell words using sounds and patterns, it is hard read some of the words.	I have attempted to spell words using sounds and patterns.	I have spelt most key content words and high frequency words correctly.	I have spelt most key content words and high frequency words correctly.
Punctuation	I do not have very much punctuation and need lots of support/reminding from a buddy or teacher.	I have used some punctuation like capitals and full stops but I need support/reminding from a buddy or teachers.	I have punctuated most of my work by myself using capitals, full stops & commas.	I have used capitals, full stops and commas with consistency.